نقد و ارزیابی ترجمه جلیل زاده از رمان «حبیبی داعشی» (با تکیه بر الگوی لادمیرال) (مقاله علمی وزارت علوم)
درجه علمی: نشریه علمی (وزارت علوم)
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ارزیابی ترجمه، بررسی سطوح و واحدهای متن، سنجش و بررسی میزان توفیق مترجم در یافتن ترجمه این واحدها است. واژه نیز ابتدایی ترین و تأثیرگذارترین واحد ترجمه است که قابلیت برخورداری از سطوح مختلف معانی را داشته است؛ به همین دلیل معادل یابی دقیق آن اهمیت بسزایی دارد. برگردان واژه باید متناسب و همسو با بافت متن باشد، گاهی برگردان واژه و بار معنایی آن قابل ترجمه نیست. برای رفع یا کاهش درصد این چالش ها در ترجمه، می توان شیوه های مختلفی را به کار گرفت. لادمیرال نظریه پرداز مقصدمحور فرانسوی مؤلفه هایی را در این خصوص مطرح می کند که مترجم با گزینش واژه هایی به عنوان معادل، بین متن ترجمه شده و متن اصلی تعادل نسبی برقرار سازد. پژوهش حاضر درصدد است که با روش توصیفی- تحلیلی، ترجمه ستار جلیل زاده از داستان «حبیبی داعشی» نوشته هاجر عبداصمد را بر اساس نظریه های کاربردی لادمیرال که عبارت اند از: جابه جایی اجزای جمله، حق انتخاب مترجم، ابهام زدایی، تکرار، ناهمگون سازی، حذف، افزوده سازی، تفسیر حداقلی، چیستی ترجمانی و خوانایی، نقد و ارزیابی نماید. مقاله حاضر با پذیرش این اصل که مناسب ترین شیوه برای برگردان کتاب «حبیبی داعشی»، شیوه ای مقصدگرا و آزاد است، نظریه لادمیرال را منطبق ترین نظریه با این اصل دانسته و آن را معیار اصلی سنجش و بررسی ترجمه جلیل زاده قرار داده است. برآیند پژوهش نشان می دهد که ترجمه جلیل زاده مطابق با این اصل، همسویی چشم گیری با نظریه لادمیرال به خصوص در مؤلفه های ابهام زدایی، خوانایی، افزوده سازی و تفسیر حداقلی دارد و مترجم توانسته، اثری متناسب با بافت فرهنگی و ادبی زبان مقصد ارائه نماید.Criticism and Evaluation of Jalelzadeh’s Translation of the Novel My Isis Beloved (Based on Ladmiral’s Theory)
Translation assessment involves examining different textual levels and units, and evaluating the translator's effectiveness in rendering these units into the target language. The word is the most basic and influential unit of translation, capable of carrying multiple layers of meaning; hence, finding its precise equivalent is crucial. Word choice must therefore be appropriate and consistent with the textual context. Sometimes, however, the semantic weight of a word cannot be fully conveyed in translation. Different methods can be used to address or mitigate these challenges. Ladmiral, a French destination-oriented theorist, proposes several strategies to help translators establish a relative balance between the source and target texts through appropriate word selection. The present research employs a descriptive-analytical method to analyze Sattar Jalilzadeh’s translation of Hajar Abdulsamad’s story Habibi Daeshi, drawing on Ladmiral’s applied theories. These include displacement of sentence parts, translator’s choice, disambiguation, repetition, heterogeneity, deletion, addition, minimal interpretation, and readability. Accepting the principle that the most suitable method to translate Habibi Daeshi is a goal-oriented and free approach, this study considers Ladmiral’s theory the most compatible framework for evaluating Jalilzadeh’s translation. The findings indicate that Jalilzadeh's translation aligns remarkably well with Ladmiral's theory, especially in the components of disambiguation, readability, addition, and minimal interpretation. The translator succeeds in producing a work that fits the cultural and literary context of the target language. Introduction Translation criticism analyzes the quality of a translation compared to the original text and examines its strengths and weaknesses. This process helps identify both the translator’s performance and potential shortcomings in the translation. Analyzing translations improves the balance between the source and target texts by identifying omissions, disproportionate changes, and substitutions, all of which influence the overall quality of the work. Translation theories are also a form of criticism, but they operate within defined frameworks of principles and rules. This study analyzes and critiques Sattar Jalilzadeh's translation of the novel Habibi Daeshi, focusing on Jean-René Ladmiral's model. The aim is to assess the quality and accuracy of the translation, as well as its effectiveness in conveying the original work’s cultural and social concepts. With this in mind, the research seeks to answer the following questions: According to Ladmiral's theory, what are the most significant strengths and weaknesses of Jalilzadeh's translation? Which components of Ladmiral's theory are less evident in Jalilzadeh's translation? Are Ladmiral's theoretical components suitable for analyzing the translation of Habibi Daeshi? If so, what are the reasons for their effectiveness? Literature Review This research draws on several relevant studies: 1.Fatemeh Mahdipour (2011), in her article Jean-René Ladmiral: Propositions for Confronting Translation Challenges, presents selections from Ladmiral’s practical theories, elaborating on them with examples from French. 2.Shahram Delshad and Seyyed Mehdi Masboq (2016), in their article A Comparative Study of the Process of Omission or Entropy in Persian Translations of One Thousand and One Nights, evaluated omissions across three categories: expressions of love, translations of poetry, and Arabic-Islamic symbols. 3.Shahram Delshad, Seyyed Mehdi Masboq, and Salahuddin Abdi (2016), in their article Revisiting Abdolatif Tasouji's Translation of the Foundational Story of One Thousand and One Nights Based on Ladmiral's Theory, demonstrated that Ladmiral's theory is highly applicable to literary translation, particularly where meaning alone is insufficient and recreation becomes essential. Research Methodology This research centers on Sattar Jalilzadeh’s translation of the novel Habibi Daeshi, analyzed using a descriptive-analytical method. Dialogues and narrative passages from both languages were extracted and assessed according to Ladmiral’s theoretical framework. The strengths and weaknesses of the translation are presented within this model. Conclusion An analysis of Jalilzadeh's translation of Habibi Daeshi reveals successful vocabulary choices that align well with the target language context. However, weaknesses appear in his use of addition and omission. While Ladmiral permits this strategy only in essential cases, Jalilzadeh occasionally employs inappropriate additions, which in rare cases compromise the accuracy of meaning transfer. Consequently, he relies less effectively on this component. Applying Ladmiral’s model demonstrates its strong applicability in literary translation, particularly for recreating and producing effective, reader-oriented texts. Jalilzadeh’s translation is target-oriented and shows notable compatibility with Ladmiral's approach, which prioritizes the target audience. Rather than strictly adhering to the source text’s structure and style, Jalilzadeh emphasizes balancing primary meanings with accessibility for the target audience. He often selects simple and suitable equivalents for primary meanings and, in some instances, directly transfers words from the source language when appropriate. When literal translation risks creating negative connotations or disharmony, he employs minimal interpretation and addition to preserve meaning. This approach reflects his commitment to producing a fluent, readable, and culturally resonant translation.
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